I tread the earth unlightly, waist too wide,
my thighs too thick, my bulging butt obscene.
I cram my fat in jeans whose buttons strain,
detested body stealing too much space.
I need to be in water floating free
to drown the noise that clutters up my mind,
my hair let loose and dancing round my head,
my adipose an ally not my foe.
Each stroke propels, I’m gliding strong and quick.
Forgiving lycra hugs my swimming form.
The ripples I create, I need not hide,
I’m buoyant, weightless, full of grace and calm.
If only I could learn to swim on land,
my soul and pride defying gravity.
So sad and uplifting at the same time. This line is lovely: I’m buoyant, weightless, full of grace and calm.
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I definitely wanted the contrast, even if it meant venturing into hyperbole in that first stanza.
I’m glad you liked that line. It had various permutations before I found the right combination.
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This one? No this one? No this one. The original one? This one. This one… Those are the voices in my head sometimes. LOL
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“Dammit! That doesn’t scan!” was what the voice in my head kept pointing out.
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Just like the Little Mermaid!
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I can tell you are a parent. We can compare anything to animated children’s stories.
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Love love love it! How we wish adipose was an ally!
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Whales and seals use blubber to their advantage – why not us?
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Oh, I totally get that feeling when I’m swimming laps. Nice job!
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Swimming can be such a mystical experience.
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“to drown the noise that clutters up my mind”
Yes. Honest, identifiable, sympathetic throughout.
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It’s like temporary sensory deprivation where you can a chance to focus.
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I love how you broke the rules and made it your own, Cyn! Keep taking those risks, please. They are paying off!
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So you noticed that my Spenserian sonnet didn’t happen? I just couldn’t get the message to fit in the rhyme scheme. Thank goodness Rowan taught us about blank verse!
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I enjoyed the line “let loose and dancing around my head.” The water does make us feel weightless.
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